Wheee, this is fun! I just completed my assignment and "handed it in," i.e., e-mailed it, to the prof.
Unfortunately the computer at the library doesn't allow you to attach documents, so I had to end up including it in the body of the email with an explanation. (He's a nice guy so I don't anticipate a problem.)
Anyhow, I'm just so pleased as punch about this, that I've included the article I wrote, below. It's based on an actual incident and an actual police report. The kayaker who was run over in the story was none other than our prof, Roy Thomas, so we were able to interview him in class in order to have a more realistic experience.
Below the article I've included the required stats from the Word program. We were to keep passive voice as low as possible, "aspire to" a Grade 10 reading level or below, and have a "reading ease" score of 55 or above. The article was to be between 250 and 300 words.
Our next article will be a column and Roy is wanting us all to try to be getting it into print somewhere, out in the real world.
Anyhow, for all of you who have been eagerly waiting, here is the article:
A motorized Zodiac boat forced a kayaker to exit underwater in Toronto Harbour yesterday afternoon, according to a Metropolitan Toronto Police report.
The Zodiac was one of two boats serving as "spotters" for two large sailboats that were racing in the harbor.
When contacted by the Sun, the capsized kayaker, Roy Thomas of Toronto, said that he had feared for his life at the time.
"I was trapped underneath the boat, underwater, and the propellers of the Zodiac boat were close by," he said.
"My wife thought I was dead."
Mr. Roy told police that he and his wife, who was in a kayak near by, had been "well clear" of the sailboats.
The two sailboats involved were the Reliant and Defiant, Canadian vessels of World Cup fame.
The police report stated that the cause of the accident appeared to be the blocked vision of the Zodiac operator. From his position in the rear of the craft, he could not see over the bow of the boat when looking forward.
The Zodiac was in violation of a number of regulations under the Canada Shipping Act, the police report said. Non-motorized boats have right-of-way over motorized ones and boats used for spotting are supposed to have two persons, not one, on board.
Mr. Thomas told the Sun that he had declined to press charges provided the sailboats agreed to obey the law in the future.
The accident raises questions about the procedures followed for such events, the report said.
At the time of the accident, visibility was excellent and Mr. Thomas was wearing a bright yellow flotation device, the report added.
Words: 270
Passive: 0%
Reading Ease: 56.2
Grade Level: 10.1
Unfortunately the computer at the library doesn't allow you to attach documents, so I had to end up including it in the body of the email with an explanation. (He's a nice guy so I don't anticipate a problem.)
Anyhow, I'm just so pleased as punch about this, that I've included the article I wrote, below. It's based on an actual incident and an actual police report. The kayaker who was run over in the story was none other than our prof, Roy Thomas, so we were able to interview him in class in order to have a more realistic experience.
Below the article I've included the required stats from the Word program. We were to keep passive voice as low as possible, "aspire to" a Grade 10 reading level or below, and have a "reading ease" score of 55 or above. The article was to be between 250 and 300 words.
Our next article will be a column and Roy is wanting us all to try to be getting it into print somewhere, out in the real world.
Anyhow, for all of you who have been eagerly waiting, here is the article:
A motorized Zodiac boat forced a kayaker to exit underwater in Toronto Harbour yesterday afternoon, according to a Metropolitan Toronto Police report.
The Zodiac was one of two boats serving as "spotters" for two large sailboats that were racing in the harbor.
When contacted by the Sun, the capsized kayaker, Roy Thomas of Toronto, said that he had feared for his life at the time.
"I was trapped underneath the boat, underwater, and the propellers of the Zodiac boat were close by," he said.
"My wife thought I was dead."
Mr. Roy told police that he and his wife, who was in a kayak near by, had been "well clear" of the sailboats.
The two sailboats involved were the Reliant and Defiant, Canadian vessels of World Cup fame.
The police report stated that the cause of the accident appeared to be the blocked vision of the Zodiac operator. From his position in the rear of the craft, he could not see over the bow of the boat when looking forward.
The Zodiac was in violation of a number of regulations under the Canada Shipping Act, the police report said. Non-motorized boats have right-of-way over motorized ones and boats used for spotting are supposed to have two persons, not one, on board.
Mr. Thomas told the Sun that he had declined to press charges provided the sailboats agreed to obey the law in the future.
The accident raises questions about the procedures followed for such events, the report said.
At the time of the accident, visibility was excellent and Mr. Thomas was wearing a bright yellow flotation device, the report added.
Words: 270
Passive: 0%
Reading Ease: 56.2
Grade Level: 10.1
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